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“Borrowing money from a friend can harm or destroy the friendship.” Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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<1>Friends are a crucial part of everyone's life. In our life time, we get to know many different peers according to our life stage. Than what relates in a friendship? I would saythat a friendship is composed of trust and harmony. <2>Therefore <3>I believe that borrowing money from a friend can harm or destroy the friendship because this can result in <4> loss of trust <5>and conflict.

Borrowing money from a friend can cause loss in trust. <6>Some people might say that a friendship is so strong that a few dollars can not influence a relationship. This can be the case, but it is also the case that money can ruin a relationship. Money is an important asset that we need to survive. Thus, borrowing this asset from a friend is a very sensitive matter. The friend that lend the money can probably act more superior to the person that borrowed the money because unconsciously, the friend knows that he or she is in a more better situation than the person who got the money. The friend with the more money might lie to the less fortunate friend that he feels sorry for him and says not to worry about paying back while in reality, he or she is very anxious in getting repaid. This can make the person who received the money distrust the friend and accuse the him of being a traitor and hypocrite. Therefore the borrowing of money can be a sensitive issue between friends.

Money can also cause conflict between <7>two or more friends. <8>When we are young we are not affected much to the money a friend has but in stead, attracted to a friend because he or she is fun to be with. However as we grow up, we learn about the value of money and what it can bring to us. Eventually friends might compete with each other for more money and this is the reason why money often results in conflict. For example, let's say that two friends work in the same company. A promotion will be given to the person who performs better. In this case the two "friends" will compete with each other. In the end however, there will be the friend who got the promotion while the other friend did not. This situation can cause conflict between the friends because even if the friend who lost says congratulation to the friend who won, he or she does not mean it and this fact will show to the other friend. In the end, the two people will probably not be able to maintain the relationship they had before.

Friendship is <9>a vulnerable <10>subject that is easily influenced by money. Money can result in financial and conflict between two people. Therefore I will say that borrowing money from a friend can harm or devastate a friendship.

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6	??→ It is true. No matter what, if you lend a friend money, you expect to be paid back. It has nothing to do with how much money your family may have. It has to do with not letting people take advantage of you, and- hopefully- knowing that you can trust your friends not to do this. ??
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8	??→ Of course, no matter how you look at it, if you lose trust in a friend, then you begin to regard him or her in a different way. Thus, you may think of your friend as a cheat, a hypocrite, or simply a liar. At some point, you will need to confront your friend about his or her actions(not paying back the money borrowed). This is so unnecessary. ??
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10	??→ enough without the strain of adding loans and collections to it. My advice: if you want to live better, only lend money when you can do it with no expectation of being paid back. That way, you can keep the friend and forget the debt. ??

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